Phân tích"Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi IELTS 25/12/2022 & 28/5/2024)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi IELTS 25/12/2022)

Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: If these juvenile delinquents were easily pardoned in place of receiving strict punishments as adults, they would not become fully aware of the serious consequences of their crimes. 
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Imposing appropriate punishments could prevent them from conducting illegal actions in the future. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng động từ "prevent" tiếng anh
        • By contrast, more young criminals would emerge if they are pardoned for their wrongdoings due to their age.
        • Some retributions are too light for the seriousness of the felonies committed, hence, cannot deter youngsters from breaking the law.
      • Example: 
        • In 2014, a 16-year-old boy in California, along with two other teenagers, stole a car and led police on a high-speed chase, ultimately crashing into another vehicle and killing an innocent driver
        • He received a two-year sentence in a juvenile detention facility followed by probation, a punishment critics argued was too lenient given the severity of the crime and unlikely to deter future criminal activity.

  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: Young perpetrators usually receive lighter sentences than they deserve, which is an injustice to the victims. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: giving young offenders lighter sentences is unjust for the victims and their families)
      • Supporting idea: This leniency can exacerbate the suffering of the victims and their families, who often feel that the punishment does not match the crime's severity.
      • Example: In Vietnam, there was a well-known case in which a teenager murdered almost every member of a family deliberately, and he escaped the death sentence due to being a few months under the responsible age. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng danh từ "teenager" tiếng anh 

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

The debate over whether young people who commit crimes should be treated the same as adults is contentious. Some argue that equal treatment ensures justice and deterrence. I totally agree that juvenile offenders should face the same legal consequences as adults.

Firstly, treating juvenile delinquents as adults emphasizes the gravity of their actions and the serious consequences of their crimes. If young offenders are easily pardoned instead of receiving strict punishments, they may not fully understand the repercussions of their behavior. By imposing appropriate penalties, the justice system can prevent these youths from engaging in illegal activities in the future. Conversely, pardoning them due to their age might lead to an increase in juvenile crime, as young people might not fear the legal consequences. To make matters worse, lenient punishments for serious offenses fail to deter youngsters from breaking the law, potentially leading to a higher crime rate among the youth. For instance, studies have shown that stricter punishments for youth crimes can significantly reduce repeat offenses.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

Secondly, treating young perpetrators with leniency often results in an injustice to the victims. When young offenders receive lighter sentences than they deserve, it undermines the suffering of the victims and their families. This disparity can be seen in cases where juveniles commit heinous crimes but avoid severe penalties due to their age. For example, in Vietnam, a teenager who murdered nearly an entire family escaped the death penalty simply because he was a few months under the legal age of responsibility. Such cases highlight the injustice faced by the victims and the potential for further harm if young offenders are not appropriately punished.

In conclusion, to ensure justice and deter future crimes, young people who commit crimes should be treated the same as adults.

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