Phân tích "The table gives information about department and online stores in Australia in 2011" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (25/6/2022 COMPUTER-BASED)

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The table gives information about department and online stores in Australia in 2011.

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  • Overall:
    • Online stores were considerably more popular in terms of the number of businesses in operation.
    • Profits and revenue of both department stores and online stores were relatively closer together.
    • The online stores also experienced meaningfully greater growth.
  • Body 1: Viết về Department Stores
    • For department stores, the total business number was 67 while the average profile was 807 Australian dollars. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng từ "average" tiếng anh 
    • 12700 AUS was the revenue of sales in domestic shops. 
    • The growth of these shops was only 4%.
  • Body 2: Viết về Online Stores 
    • For online stores, the total business number was far more than department stores (368 stores) 
    • Sales revenue was 13500 AUS which had more 700AUS than offline stores. 
    • No big difference was seen in profit it was 863 AUS. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "difference" tiếng anh
    • If we look at growth, it had 6% growth.

• Có cách viết khác để so sánh tương quan giữa Department Stores & Online Stores  như sau: 
  • Body 1: Viết về number of businesses + Profit
    • The number of businesses conducted via online stores was 368 in 2011, roughly five times higher than the figure for physical ones (67 stores) >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng danh từ "figure"
    • Profit figures in Australian dollars (AUD) presented a more narrow advantage for online retail at $863 and $807 for department stores. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Despite such a significant gap, there was no substantial difference in the figures for profit earned by department stores and online stores, with 807 AUD dollars for the former and 863 AUD dollars for the latter)
  • Body 2: Viết về Sales revenue + growth
    • Concerning revenue, online purchases also displayed marginally higher final numbers. Online purchase revenue accounted for $13,400 compared to $12,700 for department locations. 
    • The growth percentage was considerably higher for online (.6%) relative to physical department stores (.4%). >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng Figure / percentage / proportion

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