Phân tích & sửa đề"Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?" IELTS WRITING TASK 1

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: Gaming can be highly addictive because users are constantly given scores, new targets and frequent rewards to keep them playing. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng "because" & "because of" tiếng anh
      • Supporting idea: This type of addiction can have effects ranging from lack of sleep to problems at school, when homework is sacrificed for a few more hours on the computer or console.
      • Example: My nephew - Alex's gaming addiction, fueled by the allure of rewards and social connections, is taking a toll on his school performance, sleep, and real-life relationships, highlighting the negative consequences of excessive gaming
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: Some games have shown violence and sadistic scenes and affected to the gamers' mind. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Từ vựng topic "VIOLENCE & ARGUMENT"
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Exposure to violent and sadistic content in games can desensitize players to real-world violence. 
        • Over time, they may become less empathetic or sensitive to the suffering of others.
      • Example: In 2011, Anders Behring Breivik, a 25-year-old man, perpetrated a devastating bombing and mass shooting in Norway, taking 77 lives. Breivik's heavy engagement with violent video games and exposure to violent media content raised concerns about potential desensitization to violence, contributing to his remorseless and cold-blooded actions on that tragic day.
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: video games are entertaining
        • Supporting idea: video games could help people in releasing their stress >> Players could feel the excitement of being a heroic character or a professional athlete. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "release" tiếng anh
        • Example: For my friend - Sarah, a busy working mom, playing video games provides a welcome escape from the demands of her life, offering relaxation, excitement, and a sense of challenge amid her busy schedule.
      • Main idea 2: some video games are considered as educative
        • Supporting idea: they are created to trigger people's imaginative thinking
        • Example: Minecraft's educational potential shines through its block-based creativity, fostering problem-solving skills and facilitating learning across diverse subjects like science, math, and history through hands-on gameplay.
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: Gaming can be highly addictive because users are constantly given scores, new targets and frequent rewards to keep them playing. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Phân biệt CAN – COULD – BE ABLE (chỉ khả năng)
        • Supporting idea: This type of addiction can have effects ranging from lack of sleep to problems at school, when homework is sacrificed for a few more hours on the computer or console.
        • Example: My nephew - Alex's gaming addiction, fueled by the allure of rewards and social connections, is taking a toll on his school performance, sleep, and real-life relationships, highlighting the negative consequences of excessive gaming
      • Main idea 2: Some games have shown violence and sadistic scenes and affected to the gamers' mind
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Exposure to violent and sadistic content in games can desensitize players to real-world violence.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
          • Over time, they may become less empathetic or sensitive to the suffering of others.
        • Example: In 2011, Anders Behring Breivik, a 25-year-old man, perpetrated a devastating bombing and mass shooting in Norway, taking 77 lives. Breivik's heavy engagement with violent video games and exposure to violent media content raised concerns about potential desensitization to violence, contributing to his remorseless and cold-blooded actions on that tragic day.
    • Conclusion: paraphrase intro câu 2 

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