Phân tích "With the rapid advancement of communication technology such as smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020"Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "With the rapid advancement of communication technology such as smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

With the rapid advancement of communication technology such as smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: Overreliance on communication technology can lead to digital addiction, with excessive screen time affecting mental health, productivity, and social interactions. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý: Phân tích&Bài Sửa HS đạt 7.0"The diagram below shows how to recycle organic waste to produce fertiliser (compost)" IELTS WRITING TASK 1
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Social media and communication apps can evoke a fear of missing out on important updates, events, or social interactions. 
        • This fear can drive individuals to continuously check their devices to stay connected and updated.
      • Example: A study published in the Journal of the American Medical Association found that excessive screen time was associated with an increased risk of depression in adolescents. The study found that adolescents who spent more than seven hours a day on electronic devices were more likely to be depressed than those who spent less than two hours a day. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý: PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020"Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: The use of communication technology raises privacy and security concerns, as personal information and data may be vulnerable to hacking or misuse.
      • Supporting idea: Communication technology, including smartphones, computers, and internet-connected devices, can be targeted by cybercriminals seeking to gain unauthorized access to sensitive data, financial information, or personal details.
      • Example: In 2013, Ashley Madison, a dating website for married people, was hacked. The hackers stole the personal information of over 37 million users, including their names, email addresses, passwords, and credit card numbers. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý: Phân tích & Sửa đề"Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and the government should encourage some businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Does the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?" (ngày21/11/2020)
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Smartphones, tablets, and other mobile devices enable seamless communication and connection with people from around the world. 
        • Supporting idea: They facilitate instant messaging, video calls, and social media interactions, bridging geographical gaps and fostering relationships.
      • Main idea 2: Communication technology provides easy access to vast amounts of information, promoting learning, knowledge-sharing, and access to educational resources.
        • Supporting idea: Through instant messaging and video conferencing, learners can interact with educators and peers in real-time, creating a dynamic learning environment. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý: Phân tích +kèm sửa bài"The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table)
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: Overreliance on communication technology can lead to digital addiction, with excessive screen time affecting mental health, productivity, and social interactions.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Social media and communication apps can evoke a fear of missing out on important updates, events, or social interactions. 
          • This fear can drive individuals to continuously check their devices to stay connected and updated.
        • Example: A study published in the Journal of the American Medical Association found that excessive screen time was associated with an increased risk of depression in adolescents. The study found that adolescents who spent more than seven hours a day on electronic devices were more likely to be depressed than those who spent less than two hours a day
      • Main idea 2: The use of communication technology raises privacy and security concerns, as personal information and data may be vulnerable to hacking or misuse.
        • Supporting idea: Communication technology, including smartphones, computers, and internet-connected devices, can be targeted by cybercriminals seeking to gain unauthorized access to sensitive data, financial information, or personal details.
        • Example: In 2013, Ashley Madison, a dating website for married people, was hacked. The hackers stole the personal information of over 37 million users, including their names, email addresses, passwords, and credit card numbers. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý: Bài sửa đề thi 22/8"Many companies nowadays sponsor sport as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think that it is good for the world of sport. Others say there are disadvantages. Discuss both view and give opinion"HS đi thi đạt 7.0 IELTS WRITING

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