Phân tích"The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR đạt target 6.5)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?" hoặc: It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree? IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR đạt target 6.5)

The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

Hoặc:

It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • • Main idea: If people remain vigilant to avoid severe ailments, they stand a lower chance of contracting them
      • Supporting idea: Human health can be reinforced and maintained effectively in the long term via varied approaches like dieting, exercising, and even spiritual therapy. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng động từ "approach" tiếng anh
      • Example: 
        • If all people become fully convinced of the importance of choosing healthy diets involving less meat and more vegetables instead of consuming junk food, they will start to adopt such a healthy lifestyle and, therefore, will be able to avoid a host of health problems.
        • Working out on a daily basis will result in fewer patients visiting hospitals, thus reducing the amount of money spent on hospitalization and other medical fees. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách paraphrase "every day" trong tiếng anh
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • • Main idea: this strategy appears more time- and cost-effective
      • Supporting idea: 
      • Example: Once a patient is diagnosed with cancer, he or she will either pour their fortunes into immediate treatment, or choose to wait for their inevitable doom >> All this money can be well-saved, and time can be lengthened, thanks to proper preventative schemes.

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