Phân tích"The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING (Kèm bài sửa essay HS IELTS TUTOR)

Bên cạnh Cách học IELTS READING hiệu quả, IELTS TUTOR Phân tích"The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING (Kèm bài sửa essay HS IELTS TUTOR)

The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Để ý là  bài  có  chữ  best  đối  với  các  từ  có  yếu  tố  tuyệt  đối  cần  phân  tích  kĩ  nhé, với  bài  này nếu  theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: nêu lí  do thứ 1 vì  sao  TOTALLY  AGREE  với quan điểm "the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum" có  thể  triển  khai  như  sau: 
    • Main  idea  1: introduct  more  physical  education  lessons  sẽ  giúp  trẻ em có ý thức tốt hơn về việc bảo vệ sức khoẻ (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: by incorporating more sports classes into the curriculum as well as encouraging extracurricular sports activities, they will undoubtedly become fitter and more active)>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
      • Supporting idea 1: Increased physical activity through sports classes and extracurricular activities helps children maintain healthier body weights and fitness levels, reducing the risk of obesity and related health issues.
      • Example 1:  The decline in childhood obesity rates in Singapore, from 13% in the early 1990s to 10% in 2020, illustrates how introducing more physical education lessons and implementing initiatives like the Healthy Schools Program has successfully helped children maintain healthier body weights and fitness levels. A study in Pediatrics found that students involved in the program were less likely to be overweight or obese than their counterparts who did not participate.

  • Body  2: nêu lí  do thứ 2 vì  sao  TOTALLY  AGREE  với quan điểm "the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum"có  thể  triển  khai  như  sau:
    • Main  idea  2:  introduct  more  physical  education  lessons  sẽ  giúp  trẻ em trở nên  ham  thích  về  thể  dục  thể  thao  hơn, từ  đó  dẫn  đến  người  thân trong gia đình cũng yêu  thích tập luyện hơn (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: having more sports lessons for children in schools will probably result in children developing an interest in exercise which might filter through to other members of their family and have a longer lasting effect)>> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI THẬT TASK 1 (Complaint letter) NGÀY 04/8/2020 IELTS WRITING GENERAL MÁY TÍNH (kèm bài được sửa hs đi thi)
    • Supporting idea 2: parents with sporty children are more likely to get involved in sport as a way of encouraging their children. 
    • Example 2: When parents actively engage in sports with their child, such as joining a local soccer team together, they not only inspire their child's passion for sports but also foster a family environment that promotes physical activity and healthy habits.

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