Giải đề"Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? " IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (ĐỀ THI NGÀY 4/3/2023) - Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR

Bên cạnh Hướng dẫn đề thi IELTS 21/11/2020 bài WRITING TASK 1 (map) về school library (kèm bài sửa cho HS đi thi), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích & Sửa essay"Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? " IELTS

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (advantages>disadvantages)
    • Body 1: nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao advantages của gap year > disadvantages có thể triển khai:
      • Main idea: gap year sẽ cho học sinh cơ hội để nhận định lại điểm mạnh điểm yếu để định hướng kế hoạch tiếp theo trong những năm sắp tới của học sinh là gì (IELTS TUTOR dịch: A gap year will provide students with the opportunity to reassess their strengths and weaknesses in order to determine the direction of their future plans in the coming years)
      • Supporting idea: 
        • During a gap year, students have the chance to explore different interests, passions, and career paths. 
        • This exploration allows them to better understand their strengths, weaknesses, and what they are truly passionate about.
      • Example: 
        • In some countries such as Vietnam, the majority of high school students are clueless about the major of study to pursue.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn   Cách dùng - paraphrase & word form của từ "aspire" 
        • Such a problem could be solved if high school leavers have one year off dedicated to travelling and new experiences, which enables them to explore their fields of interest to make a wise educational decision. 
    • Body 2: nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao advantages của gap year > disadvantages có thể triển khai:
      • Main idea: gap year giúp học sinh có cơ hội học hỏi những điểm mới lạ, thực tế hơn là vùi đầu vào sách vở và kiến thức giáo khoa  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: A gap year is an ideal opportunity for students to learn about what is not taught at university)
      • Supporting idea:
        • Working with other people who are experts in a particular field can give these newcomers not only an understanding of the job but also valuable practical lessons to help them become more mature.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn   Cách dùng tính từ"practical"tiếng anh 
        • When it comes to applying for a position in a company, employers tend to favourably consider applicants who possess extensive experience in life and the occupation.
      • Example: My nephew Liam's gap year working on a research vessel in the Caribbean provided him with practical, hands-on experience in marine biology, fostering maturity, enhancing his skills in teamwork and problem-solving, solidifying his passion for the field, and ultimately setting him apart as a strong candidate for future academic and career opportunities. 
    • IELTS TUTOR gợi ý các ý khác: 
      • Main idea: Having a year to relax can be advantageous as students can have a chance to relieve stress in study. 
      • Supporting idea: With a comfortable and willing attitude, undergraduates can acquire knowledge more effectively in comparison with those who go to university right away.
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea: Having a year to relax can be advantageous as students can have a chance to relieve stress in study.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng danh từ"tutorial"tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea: With a comfortable and willing attitude, undergraduates can acquire knowledge more effectively in comparison with those who go to university right away.
      • Main idea 2:  those taking a gap year can enjoy an advantage over their peers with problem-solving and task management skills, which may be enhanced through such experiences. 
        • Supporting idea: These skills are of great benefits to their higher education pursuits, enabling faster and more effective learning.
        • Example: Studies by Fletcher (2008) and Lunt & Milligan (2011) suggest that gap year experiences involving independent travel or living situations can lead to increased resourcefulness, adaptability, and problem-solving skills
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: taking some time off for travel and work before starting university life may discourage some students from continuing their study later on
        • Supporting idea:
          • It is understandably almost impossible for young people to enjoy their experiences in doing a job or travelling to a new place but still arrange a certain amount of time for revision.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ "sort" tiếng anh 
          • As a result, gap-year takers may have to face the challenge of becoming familiar with the knowledge at school again, receiving more pressure of catching up with their peers.
      • Main idea 2:  the life outside the university campus may prove to be mentally and physically overwhelming for inexperienced school leavers. 
        • Supporting idea: If not well prepared for such possible obstacles, young high school graduates can suffer from unintended consequences.
        • Example: They, for instance, may be at risk of being exploited in an exhausting job or face potential dangers on their trips to a new country. 

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