Bên cạnh hướng dẫn kĩ thêm cách phân tích đề thi thật IELTS GENERAL TRAINING dạng Complaint letter, bài này là đề thi thật 04/8/2020, IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn thêm Phân tích & Sửa đề"Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults" IELTS WRITING
I. Đề bài
Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
II. Từ vựng
IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn TỪ VỰNG TOPIC CRIME IELTS
III. Phân tích
IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:
- Nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE sẽ phân bố bố cục như sau:
- Intro câu 2: TOTALLY AGREE với ý kiến "It is necessary for governments to implement a policy of zero tolerance to dangerous crimes regardless of the ages"
- Body 1: viết lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE với quan điểm đề cho là "Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults"
- Main idea 1: Strict punishments could demonstrate to adolescents that heinous actions will have consequences, and this can help to dispel any ideas of committing crimes of young people in communities >> legal deterrent is essential >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng danh từ "control" tiếng anh
- Supporting idea 1: Adolescents may think twice about engaging in criminal activities if they know they could face significant penalties such as incarceration, fines, or community service.
- Example 1: In 2017, the US city of Philadelphia implemented a program called "Project Safe Neighborhoods" (PSN), which aimed to reduce gun violence by increasing penalties for gun crimes, especially those committed by juveniles, resulting in a significant decrease in gun violence, particularly among juveniles
- Body 2: viết lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE với quan điểm đề cho là "Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults"
- Main idea: To reduce crime rates, particularly reoffending rates, it is argued that young individuals who commit severe offenses like robbery or violent attacks should face equivalent punishments as adults >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân biệt "ESPECIALLY" & "SPECIALLY" tiếng anh
- Supporting idea: By subjecting young offenders to adult punishments, society can keep potentially dangerous individuals off the streets and reduce the immediate risk they pose.
- Example: In VN, young offenders aged below eighteen will be put on probation even if they commit a serious crime such as murder. As a result, the number of young people who break the law in VN has been increasing rapidly
IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:
It is often argued that young people who commit severe crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks, should be punished in the same way as adults. I totally agree with this view because strict punishments act as a deterrent and help reduce crime rates effectively.
Punishing young offenders as adults serves as a powerful deterrent, discouraging adolescents from engaging in serious crimes. If young people understand that heinous actions will lead to severe consequences, such as incarceration or fines, they may reconsider committing such offenses. For instance, the "Project Safe Neighborhoods" initiative implemented in Philadelphia in 2017 focused on increasing penalties for gun-related crimes, particularly those committed by juveniles. This program successfully reduced gun violence among young people, proving the effectiveness of strict penalties in curbing youth crime. Therefore, enforcing the same legal framework for both young offenders and adults creates a sense of accountability among juveniles and discourages future criminal behavior.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR
Additionally, equivalent punishments for young offenders can significantly lower crime rates, especially reoffending rates. By subjecting young criminals to adult penalties, society ensures that dangerous individuals are kept off the streets, minimizing the risks they pose to others. In Vietnam, for example, young offenders under eighteen are often placed on probation even for severe crimes like murder. This lenient approach has contributed to a rapid increase in youth-related criminal activities. If stricter measures were applied, young individuals would better understand the gravity of their actions and be less likely to reoffend. Thus, treating young offenders like adults is essential for maintaining public safety.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young offenders should face the same punishments as adults to serve as a deterrent and effectively reduce crime rates in society.
Vocabulary:
- Deterrent (rào cản): Một biện pháp hoặc hành động khiến người khác không muốn làm điều gì đó, thường là điều xấu.
- IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Punishments act as a deterrent to crime.
- Reconsider (xem xét lại): Nghĩ lại và cân nhắc lại một quyết định hoặc hành động trước đây.
- IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: They may reconsider their actions if penalties are strict.
- Sense of accountability (tinh thần trách nhiệm): Sự nhận thức về trách nhiệm đối với hành động của mình.
- IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: A sense of accountability discourages individuals from breaking the law.
- Reoffending (tái phạm): Phạm tội lần nữa sau khi đã bị phạt hoặc bị kết án.
- IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Strict penalties can reduce reoffending rates.
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