🔥Phân tích"People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Kèm bài mẫu giải thích từ vựng & từ đồng nghĩa - Sửa bài HS IELTS TUTOR) - Đề thi IELTS 25/1/2024

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Bên cạnh HƯỚNG DẪN TỪNG BƯỚC CÁCH LÀM BÀI TẬP MẪU IELTS READING DẠNG FILL IN THE GAP, IELTS TUTOR cung cấp thêm Phân tích & Sửa bài essay về "spending less time with their family" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

I. Đề bài

People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?

II. Từ vựng

IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Từ vựng Topic Family IELTS

III. Phân tích

Dạng bài này thuộc dạng 2 question essay là dạng rất đỗi quen thuộc đối với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR

Dạng bài này sẽ phân chia bố cục 2 đoạn thân bài như sau:

Body 1: Causes (Nên chọn ra 2 causes)

Main Idea 1: Technologies separate family members and deter them from connecting with each other in a meaningful way. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn: Cách paraphrase "prevent" tiếng anh

  • Supporting Idea: Some people think that they are with their children, but the fact is that they just stay in one place with their children while different people do different things in the same house.
  • Example: If family members become too immersed in using their devices for individual recreational purposes, like checking their social media accounts or browsing their favorite websites, they may neglect their relationships with other family members.

Main Idea 2: Time with their children, parents, or spouses is so scarce. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: The amount of quality time that a family spends together is likely to reduce, negatively impacting family relations)

Body 2: Effects (Nên chọn ra 2 effects)

Main Idea 1: An individual may experience emotional distress if they do not receive proper support from their immediate family.

  • Supporting Idea: This is because it is believed that family is where people can share their feelings and problems, which help them release their stress >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn: Từ vựng topic "Family history" IELTS
  • Example: Young children who do not have time with their siblings or parents are often more vulnerable to social pressures, such as bullying, because they do not receive enough affection and encouragement from their family. In reality, those children may grow up with low self-esteem and sometimes depression.

Main Idea 2: The bonds between parents and children may be weakened, which usually leads to conflicts and unhappiness.

  • Supporting Idea: Family relationships will greatly suffer because it will become more difficult to bridge the generation gap between parents and children without family bonding time >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn: Từ vựng topic Family (child education, child birth...) IELTS
  • Example: For instance, when parents do not spend much time with their children, their children will lack appropriate parental care and attention and are likely to follow a path toward criminal behaviors.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

It is undeniable that modern lifestyles have significantly altered the dynamics of family relationships. This essay will explore two primary causes of weakened family bonds and discuss the adverse effects of this phenomenon.

One major cause is that technological advancements (sự tiến bộ của công nghệ) have increasingly diminished (làm giảm dần, suy yếu) the quality of family interactions. Many individuals believe they are spending time with their family members, but in reality, they are merely coexisting in the same space while engaging with their personal devices. For example, if people become too immersed (mê mải, chìm đắm) in social media or online entertainment, they may neglect meaningful communication with their loved ones. Another contributing factor is the scarcity (sự khan hi khan hi\u1ebm, thiếu thốn) of quality time shared among family members. Due to the relentless (không ngừng nghỉ, dai dẳng) pace of modern life and mounting work pressure, people often struggle to allocate sufficient time for their families, leading to emotional detachment.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

The effects of this disconnection are profound. Firstly, individuals may experience emotional distress (sự căng thẳng về cảm xúc) due to a lack of familial support. The family is traditionally seen as a primary source of comfort and guidance, helping members to alleviate (làm giảm bớt, xoa diễu) stress. For instance, young children deprived of parental attention may become more vulnerable to peer pressure, potentially leading to low self-esteem or even depression. Secondly, weakened parental bonds can foster discord (sự bất hòa, mâu thuẫn) within the household. Without adequate bonding time, bridging the generation gap (khoảng cách thế hệ) between parents and children becomes increasingly difficult, which may result in conflicts and behavioral issues. For example, children who lack parental supervision and emotional connection are more prone to engaging in delinquent activities.

In conclusion, the diminishing quality of family relationships stems from technological distractions and time constraints, leading to emotional struggles and weakened familial ties. To address this, individuals should prioritize face-to-face interactions and establish meaningful connections within their families.

New Vocabulary List:

  1. Technological advancements (sự tiến bộ của công nghệ)

    • Innovations and improvements in technology that impact daily life.

    • Synonyms: scientific progress, digital evolution, modern innovations

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "One major cause is that technological advancements have increasingly diminished the quality of family interactions."

  2. Diminished (làm giảm dần, suy yếu)

    • Reduced in size, importance, or effectiveness.

    • Synonyms: weakened, lessened, reduced

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "One major cause is that technological advancements have increasingly diminished the quality of family interactions."

  3. Immersed (mê mải, chìm đắm)

    • Deeply involved or absorbed in an activity.

    • Synonyms: engrossed, captivated, preoccupied

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "If people become too immersed in social media or online entertainment, they may neglect meaningful communication with their loved ones."

  4. Scarcity (sự khan hiếm, thiếu thốn)

    • A shortage or insufficient amount of something.

    • Synonyms: shortage, lack, deficiency

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Another contributing factor is the scarcity of quality time shared among family members."

  5. Relentless (không ngừng nghỉ, dai dẳng)

    • Continuing without stopping or becoming less intense.

    • Synonyms: persistent, unceasing, nonstop

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Due to the relentless pace of modern life and mounting work pressure, people often struggle to allocate sufficient time for their families."

  6. Emotional distress (sự căng thẳng về cảm xúc)

    • A state of mental suffering caused by stress, anxiety, or sadness.

    • Synonyms: mental anguish, psychological pain, emotional turmoil

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Firstly, individuals may experience emotional distress due to a lack of familial support."

  7. Alleviate (làm giảm bớt, xoa diễu)

    • To reduce or lessen something unpleasant.

    • Synonyms: ease, relieve, soothe

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "The family is traditionally seen as a primary source of comfort and guidance, helping members to alleviate stress."

  8. Discord (sự bất hòa, mâu thuẫn)

    • Disagreement or conflict between people.

    • Synonyms: conflict, dispute, disharmony

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Weakened parental bonds can foster discord within the household."

  9. Generation gap (khoảng cách thế hệ)

    • Differences in opinions and values between older and younger generations.

    • Synonyms: age gap, cultural gap, generational divide

    • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Without adequate bonding time, bridging the generation gap between parents and children becomes increasingly difficult."

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