Phân tích "Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng opinion essay thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: students may become aware of the consequences of engaging in criminal activities when attending a talk given by ex-prisoners. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "consequence" tiếng anh 
      • Supporting idea:
        • Reformed offenders can tell young people about how they became involved in crime, the dangers of a criminal lifestyle, and what life in prison is really like. 
        • Their life stories are often vivid and persuasive, and this can attract the attention of school students easily. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng động từ "attract" tiếng anh 
        • These ex-criminals are real examples that people have to pay for their unlawful activities, which can raise awareness about law-abiding citizens among young people. 
      • Example: The success of a series of educational programs on Vietnamese Television channels about the price that offenders have to pay proves that the narrative forms of crime education can work >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng từ "education" tiếng anh
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: Those who were penalized by the law would feel better by sharing their stories, and this is a fantastic way to keep away from offences for these folks.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • They would feel better by sharing their stories, and this is a fantastic way to keep away from offences for these folks. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "would" tiếng anh 
        • They would also feel connected to society and are glad for doing something great.
      • Example: The Circles of Support and Accountability (COSA) program, a restorative justice initiative, has demonstrated a 24% lower re-arrest rate among participants, fostering remorse, life satisfaction, and positive relationships by bringing together offenders, victims, and community members to prevent future offenses.

• Theo hướng Partly (Vừa ủng hộ ý này, vừa ủng hộ ý kia) có thể tham khảo cách triển khai: 
  • Intro câu 2: Trong khi ý này cũng đúng, ý kia cũng có lý
    • Body 1: On the other hand, viết về ý số 1”these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime”
      • Main idea 1: students may become aware of the consequences of engaging in criminal activities when attending a talk given by ex-prisoners. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "consequence" tiếng anh 
        • Supporting idea:
          • Reformed offenders can tell young people about how they became involved in crime, the dangers of a criminal lifestyle, and what life in prison is really like. 
          • Their life stories are often vivid and persuasive, and this can attract the attention of school students easily. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng động từ "attract" tiếng anh 
          • These ex-criminals are real examples that people have to pay for their unlawful activities, which can raise awareness about law-abiding citizens among young people. 
        • Example: The success of a series of educational programs on Vietnamese Television channels about the price that offenders have to pay proves that the narrative forms of crime education can work >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng từ "education" tiếng anh
      • Main idea 2: Those who were penalized by the law would feel better by sharing their stories, and this is a fantastic way to keep away from offences for these folks.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • They would feel better by sharing their stories, and this is a fantastic way to keep away from offences for these folks. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "would" tiếng anh 
          • They would also feel connected to society and are glad for doing something great.
        • Example: The Circles of Support and Accountability (COSA) program, a restorative justice initiative, has demonstrated a 24% lower re-arrest rate among participants, fostering remorse, life satisfaction, and positive relationships by bringing together offenders, victims, and community members to prevent future offenses.
    • Body 2: On the one hand, viết về ý số 2”ngoài việc đưa những người đã từng ở tù đến nói chuyện, governments có thể triển khai những chương trình khác HOẶC body 2 có thể viết những người này chưa chắc là người tốt nhất để đến nói chuyện ”
      • Main idea 1: Individuals with a criminal past may not be credible role models and might inadvertently glamorize or normalize criminal behavior. 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Individuals who have engaged in criminal activities have, by definition, violated societal norms and laws. 
          • This history raises concerns about their moral compass and values. 
      • Main idea 2: Critics also express concerns about the potential triggering effect such messages could have on vulnerable teenagers, leading them to romanticize the notion of a rebellious, outlaw lifestyle.>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
        • Supporting idea:
          • Adolescence is a period marked by vulnerability, identity exploration, and a desire for belonging. 
          • Teenagers may be particularly susceptible to external influences as they seek to define themselves and find their place in society. >> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ Hướng dẫn đề thi IELTS 21/11/2020 bài WRITING TASK 1 (map) về school library (kèm bài sửa cho HS đi thi)
          • Messages from former inmates could exploit this vulnerability, leading some teenagers to romanticize and idealize a criminal lifestyle as a means of rebellion or identity formation.

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