Phân tích"School leavers prefer to travel or work rather than directly going to university. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to their study"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Đề thi IELTS GENERAL 28/9/2024 (Kèm bài sửa cho HS IELTS TUTOR)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"School leavers prefer to travel or work rather than directly going to university. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to their study"IELTS WRITING TASK 2

School leavers prefer to travel or work rather than directly going to university. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to their study?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng outweigh thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé
• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (advantages>disadvantages)
    • Body 1: nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao advantages của gap year > disadvantages có thể triển khai:
      • Main idea: gap year sẽ cho học sinh cơ hội để nhận định lại điểm mạnh điểm yếu để định hướng kế hoạch tiếp theo trong những năm sắp tới của học sinh là gì 
      • Supporting idea: 
      • Example: 
        • In some countries such as Vietnam, the majority of high school students are clueless about the major of study to pursue.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn   Cách dùng - paraphrase & word form của từ "aspire" 
        • Such a problem could be solved if high school leavers have one year off dedicated to travelling and new experiences, which enables them to explore their fields of interest to make a wise educational decision. 
    • Body 2: nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao advantages của gap year > disadvantages có thể triển khai:
      • Main idea: gap year giúp học sinh có cơ hội học hỏi những điểm mới lạ, thực tế hơn là vùi đầu vào sách vở và kiến thức giáo khoa  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: A gap year is an ideal opportunity for students to learn about what is not taught at university)
      • Supporting idea:
        • Working with other people who are experts in a particular field can give these newcomers not only an understanding of the job but also valuable practical lessons to help them become more mature.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn   Cách dùng tính từ"practical"tiếng anh 
        • When it comes to applying for a position in a company, employers tend to favourably consider applicants who possess extensive experience in life and the occupation.
    • IELTS TUTOR gợi ý các ý khác: 
      • Main idea: Having a year to relax can be advantageous as students can have a chance to relieve stress in study. 
      • Supporting idea: With a comfortable and willing attitude, undergraduates can acquire knowledge more effectively in comparison with those who go to university right away.
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea: Having a year to relax can be advantageous as students can have a chance to relieve stress in study.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng danh từ"tutorial"tiếng anh
        • Supporting idea: With a comfortable and willing attitude, undergraduates can acquire knowledge more effectively in comparison with those who go to university right away.
      • Main idea 2:  those taking a gap year can enjoy an advantage over their peers with problem-solving and task management skills, which may be enhanced through such experiences. 
        • Supporting idea: These skills are of great benefits to their higher education pursuits, enabling faster and more effective learning.
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: taking some time off for travel and work before starting university life may discourage some students from continuing their study later on
        • Supporting idea:
          • It is understandably almost impossible for young people to enjoy their experiences in doing a job or travelling to a new place but still arrange a certain amount of time for revision.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ "sort" tiếng anh 
          • As a result, gap-year takers may have to face the challenge of becoming familiar with the knowledge at school again, receiving more pressure of catching up with their peers
      • Main idea 2:  the life outside the university campus may prove to be mentally and physically overwhelming for inexperienced school leavers. 
        • Supporting idea: If not well prepared for such possible obstacles, young high school graduates can suffer from unintended consequences.
        • Example: They, for instance, may be at risk of being exploited in an exhausting job or face potential dangers on their trips to a new country. 

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

The decision of school leavers to travel or work before entering university is becoming increasingly popular. While this trend offers several advantages, it also has notable disadvantages.

On the one hand, taking a gap year can be highly beneficial for students. First, it provides an opportunity for relaxation and stress relief after years of intense academic pressure. This break allows students to return to their studies with a fresh mindset and greater enthusiasm, potentially leading to more effective learning compared to those who proceed directly to university. Moreover, a gap year can also equip students with valuable life skills. By traveling or working, they develop problem-solving abilities and task management skills that can enhance their university experience. These skills can help them adapt more quickly to academic challenges and manage their workload more efficiently.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

On the other hand, the decision to take time off may also have its drawbacks. For some students, a gap year might disrupt their academic momentum and lead to a loss of focus. After spending time working or traveling, some students may struggle to re-engage with their studies, facing the challenge of catching up with their peers. Additionally, the experience of working or traveling could be overwhelming for young school leavers who are not fully prepared for the responsibilities they will face. Without proper guidance, they might encounter exploitative work conditions or even find themselves in unsafe situations abroad, which could have long-term negative effects on their personal and academic growth.

In conclusion, while taking a gap year offers both benefits and challenges, students should carefully weigh these factors to make an informed decision about their future.

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