🔥Phân tích "New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Bài mẫu, kèm dịch & giải thích từ vựng & cấu trúc grammar khó​ (Đề thi máy 7/8/2022)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi máy 6/8/2022)

New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng outweigh thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: children might develop a passive lifestyle and possibly isolate themselves from society. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: As entertaining programs and apps are extremely attractive, children are more likely to be engrossed in those pastimes and spend less time on physical and outdoor activities) >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng từ "likely" tiếng anh 
      • Supporting idea: 
        • This is because this way of entertainment is extremely addictive, and children therefore are likely to spend hours in their room without any communication with the outside world if exposed frequently. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Phân biệt "addicted" và "addictive" tiếng anh 
        • A sedentary lifestyle, as a consequence, is gradually developed, making children vulnerable to obesity, diabetes and cardiovascular diseases.
      • Example: My cousin - Billy's shift from active outdoor activities to prolonged video gaming has led to a sedentary lifestyle, diminishing his social interactions and putting him at risk of health issues like obesity, diabetes, and cardiovascular diseases.
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: exposure to technology could lead to deterioration in health as hours spent on using computers can cause tremendous harm to eyesight.
      • Supporting idea: Children at school age are suffering from short-sight due to playing video games or browsing Facebook for a long time.
      • Example: In 2022, a study published in the journal Nature found that children living in countries with a high prevalence of myopia (nearsightedness) are spending more time using digital devices than children in countries with a low prevalence of myopia.
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: More choices are now available on computers or any other electrical devices that are connected to the Internet. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "MORE" trong tiếng anh 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • This would satisfy children of different preferences for entertainment, such as watching movies, listening to music or playing games on online platform.
          • Smart devices enable children to explore the outside world without limitations.
          • With a click of the mouse or a touch on the screen, children can effortlessly figure out satisfactory answers for their questions, which broadens their horizons beyond lessons taught at school. >> IELTS TUTOR Giải thích phrasal verb: figure out
        • Example: For example, a child who loves music can listen to songs from all over the world, watch music videos, and even learn to play an instrument online. A child who loves to play games can find games of all genres and skill levels. And a child who loves to socialize can connect with friends and family online, or even make new friends from all over the world.
      • Main idea 2: some useful skills and necessary qualities can be either initially obtained or horned by playing electronic games. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng "quality" tiếng anh 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Creativity and fast reflexes which are of great use in the future can be enhanced though puzzle or shooting games.
          • Scientifically, racing games help develop motor skills in later life. 
        • Example: For example, puzzle games can help to develop problem-solving skills, critical thinking skills, and creativity. Shooting games can help to develop fast reflexes, hand-eye coordination, and spatial awareness. And racing games can help to develop motor skills and decision-making skills.
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: Children might develop a passive lifestyle and possibly isolate themselves from society. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng danh từ "society" tiếng anh 
        • Supporting idea: This is because this way of entertainment is extremely addictive, and children therefore are likely to spend hours in their room without any communication with the outside world if exposed frequently.
        • Example: My cousin - Billy's shift from active outdoor activities to prolonged video gaming has led to a sedentary lifestyle, diminishing his social interactions and putting him at risk of health issues like obesity, diabetes, and cardiovascular diseases.
      • Main idea 2: exposure to technology could lead to deterioration in health as hours spent on using computers can cause tremendous harm to eyesight.
        • Supporting idea: In fact, children at school age are suffering from short-sight due to playing video games or browsing Facebook for a long time.
        • Example: In 2022, a study published in the journal Nature found that children living in countries with a high prevalence of myopia (nearsightedness) are spending more time using digital devices than children in countries with a low prevalence of myopia.
  • IELTS TUTOR gợi ý thêm về ý advantages: Educational channels on the internet provide lessons in an interesting and lively way such as funny videos or witty movies; therefore, children find it the process of acquiring knowledge more appealing.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

The proliferation of cutting-edge (tiên tiến, hiện đại - extremely modern and advanced) technologies has revolutionized children's leisure activities. While digital innovations provide engaging recreational options, I firmly believe that their detrimental ramifications (tác hại nghiêm trọng - serious and harmful effects) far surpass the benefits.

One major drawback is that children risk developing a sedentary lifestyle (lối sống ít vận động - a way of life involving little physical activity), which often leads to social alienation (sự xa lánh xã hội - the state of feeling isolated from society). Given the alluring nature (sự hấp dẫn - being extremely attractive or interesting) of online content, children frequently spend hours engrossed in video games or social media, neglecting face-to-face interactions. For instance, my cousin Billy, once an active child, became reclusive (sống tách biệt - preferring to be alone) after immersing himself in online gaming, which not only impaired his communication skills but also escalated his risk of lifestyle-related diseases (bệnh liên quan đến lối sống - illnesses caused by poor lifestyle habits) like obesity and diabetes.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

Another pressing concern is the desensitization (sự mất cảm giác - the process of becoming less affected by something shocking) of young minds due to exposure to violent digital content. Studies indicate that prolonged engagement (sự tham gia dài hạn - continuous involvement for a long period) in aggressive video games fosters juvenile delinquency (tội phạm vị thành niên - criminal behavior among young people). Young children, lacking cognitive maturity (trưởng thành về nhận thức - the ability to think and reason at an advanced level), may imitate antisocial behaviors and exhibit aggressive tendencies (xu hướng bạo lực - an inclination to act violently). Research by the National Institute of Mental Health underscores this issue, revealing that children extensively exposed to violent media have an elevated propensity (khuynh hướng cao hơn - a higher likelihood) for developing aggression.

In conclusion, despite the multifaceted (nhiều khía cạnh - having many aspects) benefits of technology in broadening children's entertainment choices, its far-reaching (có ảnh hưởng rộng - having a great influence) negative impacts on health and social skills render it a double-edged sword (con dao hai lưỡi - something that has both positive and negative consequences). Without stringent (nghiêm ngặt - strict and firm) parental control, the disadvantages will inevitably overshadow any advantages.

New Vocabulary & Definitions:

1. Cutting-edge - (tiên tiến, hiện đại) extremely modern and advanced.

2. Detrimental ramifications - (tác hại nghiêm trọng) serious and harmful effects.

3. Sedentary lifestyle - (lối sống ít vận động) a way of life involving little physical activity.

4. Social alienation - (sự xa lánh xã hội) feeling isolated from society.

5. Alluring nature - (sự hấp dẫn) being extremely attractive or interesting.

6. Reclusive - (sống tách biệt) preferring to be alone.

7. Lifestyle-related diseases - (bệnh liên quan đến lối sống) illnesses caused by poor lifestyle habits.

8. Desensitization - (sự mất cảm giác) becoming less affected by something shocking.

9. Prolonged engagement - (sự tham gia dài hạn) continuous involvement for a long period.

10. Juvenile delinquency - (tội phạm vị thành niên) criminal behavior among young people.

11. Cognitive maturity - (trưởng thành về nhận thức) the ability to think and reason at an advanced level.

12. Aggressive tendencies - (xu hướng bạo lực) an inclination to act violently.

13. Elevated propensity - (khuynh hướng cao hơn) a higher likelihood.

14. Multifaceted - (nhiều khía cạnh) having many aspects.

15. Far-reaching - (có ảnh hưởng rộng) having a great influence.

16. A double-edged sword - (con dao hai lưỡi) something that has both positive and negative consequences.

17. Stringent - (nghiêm ngặt) strict and firm.

Grammar Structures:

1. Relative Clause - IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Research by the National Institute of Mental Health underscores this issue, revealing that children extensively exposed to violent media have an elevated propensity for developing aggression."

   • (Nghiên cứu... chỉ ra rằng trẻ em tiếp xúc với phương tiện truyền thông bạo lực có xu hướng bạo lực cao hơn.)

2. Complex Sentences - IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: "Given the alluring nature of online content, children frequently spend hours engrossed in video games or social media, neglecting face-to-face interactions."

   • (Do nội dung trực tuyến rất hấp dẫn, trẻ em thường dành hàng giờ chơi game hoặc dùng mạng xã hội, bỏ qua giao tiếp trực tiếp.)

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