Phân tích "More and more measures to improve the security in the urban area have been introduced because of the increased crime. Do the benefits of the measures outweigh the drawbacks?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020"Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "More and more measures to improve the security in the urban area have been introduced because of the increased crime. Do the benefits of the measures outweigh the drawbacks?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

More and more measures to improve the security in the urban area have been introduced because of the increased crime. Do the benefits of the measures outweigh the drawbacks?

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• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (advantages>disadvantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao advantages>disadvantages
      • Main idea: Visible security measures such as increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces can deter criminal activities, making residents feel safer and potentially reducing crime rates.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • The presence of law enforcement officers and security personnel in public areas creates a sense of vigilance and raises the perceived risk of being caught in criminal acts. 
        • Criminals are less likely to commit offenses in areas where they believe they are being actively monitored.
      • Example: In New York City, a study by the Police Department found that crime rates decreased significantly after the city implemented a number of visible security measures, including increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces.
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao advantages>disadvantages
      • Main idea: When residents perceive their neighborhoods as safe, they are more likely to engage in community activities, local businesses thrive, and the overall quality of life improves.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Feeling safe encourages residents to participate in community activities, events, and local initiatives. 
        • They are more likely to attend neighborhood gatherings, join clubs, and collaborate on projects that enhance community cohesion.
      • Example: In the United States, a study by the University of Chicago found that residents of neighborhoods that were perceived as safe were more likely to participate in community activities, such as volunteering and attending neighborhood meetings.
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Visible security measures such as increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces can deter criminal activities, making residents feel safer and potentially reducing crime rates.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • The presence of law enforcement officers and security personnel in public areas creates a sense of vigilance and raises the perceived risk of being caught in criminal acts. 
          • Criminals are less likely to commit offenses in areas where they believe they are being actively monitored.>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
        • Example: In New York City, a study by the Police Department found that crime rates decreased significantly after the city implemented a number of visible security measures, including increased police presence, surveillance cameras, and well-lit public spaces.
      • Main idea 2: When residents perceive their neighborhoods as safe, they are more likely to engage in community activities, local businesses thrive, and the overall quality of life improves.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Feeling safe encourages residents to participate in community activities, events, and local initiatives. 
          • They are more likely to attend neighborhood gatherings, join clubs, and collaborate on projects that enhance community cohesion.
        • Example: In the United States, a study by the University of Chicago found that residents of neighborhoods that were perceived as safe were more likely to participate in community activities, such as volunteering and attending neighborhood meetings.
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: Intensive surveillance measures, while aiming to enhance security, can infringe on individual privacy rights and contribute to feelings of surveillance and mistrust within communities.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Extensive surveillance can lead to the collection of vast amounts of personal information without individuals' consent or knowledge. >> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ SỬA BÀI IELTS WRITING TASK 2 ĐỀ THI THẬT NGÀY 22/8/2020 của HS IELTS TUTOR đạt 6.5 Writing
          • This infringes upon their right to privacy and raises concerns about how their data is being used and shared.
        • Example: In the United Kingdom, a study by the Surveillance Studies Centre found that residents of neighborhoods with high levels of surveillance felt less safe and more distrustful of their neighbors.
      • Main idea 2: Some security measures can disproportionately affect certain segments of the population, leading to feelings of discrimination and exclusion. 
        • Supporting idea: Security measures may be designed and implemented with biases that reflect societal stereotypes and prejudices, leading to unintended discrimination against certain racial, ethnic, or socioeconomic groups.
        • Example: For example, excessive policing in marginalized communities can worsen social divides.

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