Phân tích "Many school children and students are taught to try to push themselves to be competitive and to do better than other students, instead of teaming up. Do the disadvantages of making students competitive outweigh the advantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR)

Bên cạnh Phân tích +kèm sửa bài"The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Many school children and students are taught to try to push themselves to be competitive and to do better than other students, instead of teaming up. Do the disadvantages of making students competitive outweigh the advantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

Many school children and students are taught to try to push themselves to be competitive and to do better than other students, instead of teaming up. Do the disadvantages of making students competitive outweigh the advantages?

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• Intro câu 2 & conclusion: advantages = disadvantages  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: I hold the view that the benefits and drawbacks of this approach are evenly balanced)
• Body 1: Viết về advantages
  • On the one hand, it is true that encouraging students to continuously practice and improve themselves in school is essential in today's technologically advanced society. In fact, learning is an ongoing process, and individuals need to be adaptable and knowledgeable to succeed and face challenges. Therefore, if students do not strive for self-development, they risk falling behind their more skilled peers. For example, in exams like Vietnam's University Entrance Exam, even a slight score improvement can greatly impact admission to preferred universities, emphasizing the importance of motivating students to enhance their performance.>> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)
• Body 2: Viết về disadvantages
  • On the other hand, it is also evident that over-promoting competitiveness brings harm to students. FIRSTLY, this tendency increases the risk of students facing psychological problems. This is because high expectations from schools can turn motivation into pressure, leading to issues like peer pressure, depression, and even atychiphobia, which makes students fearful, unmotivated, and disconnected. This can hinder their ability to compete, socialize, and cooperate, fostering intolerance and ruthless behavior. SECONDLY, teaching students to be overly competitive can make them intolerant and ruthless, leading to a willingness to achieve their goals through cunning or cruel means. [cho thêm 1 ví dụ vào đây] >> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ SỬA BÀI IELTS WRITING TASK 2 ĐỀ THI THẬT NGÀY 22/8/2020 của HS IELTS TUTOR đạt 6.5 Writing

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