Phân tích "Many jobs at home nowadays can be done by machines. Has it brought more advantages than disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020"Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Many jobs at home nowadays can be done by machines. Has it brought more advantages than disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

Many jobs at home nowadays can be done by machines. Has it brought more advantages than disadvantages?​

• Dạng outweigh thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé
• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: The delegation of various mechanical tasks to robots is likely to give rise to greater unemployment figures. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng tính từ "various" tiếng anh 
        • Supporting idea: In the workplace, especially in manufacturing, millions of workers worldwide, particularly unskilled ones, would lose their jobs to cutting-edge robotic systems. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: Currently, large numbers of manual workers are being replaced by cutting-edge robotics systems in numerous factories around the world)
        • Example: 
          • For example, fully automated processes have already taken over monotonous jobs such as assembly-line workers or bank tellers in many developed countries such as the United States.
          • For instance, thousands of Chinese assembly workers at FoxConn, a major manufacturer of Apple products, have recently been made redundant after the company adopted a fully automated process that minimizes the need for a skilled and unskilled human labor supply.
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: At home, This tendendy may lead to a sedentary lifestyle, which results in some health problems such as obesity in the long term. >> IELTS UTOR lưu ý Cách dùng cụm in the long run​/​term/in the short term
        • Supporting idea: People are becoming overly dependent on technological assistance to deal with various household chores such as cleaning or washing dishes. 
        • Example: Imagine a family that heavily relies on automated devices for household chores, minimizing physical activity. While these technological conveniences make daily tasks easier, the decreasing need for physical movement could lead to a sedentary lifestyle, potentially contributing to health issues like obesity in the long term.
  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: It often increases efficiency, reduces human error, and can perform tasks that might be too dangerous or repetitive for humans. 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Machines often increase efficiency by executing tasks at a faster pace and consistently, without getting fatigued or distracted. 
          • They significantly reduce human error by following programmed instructions precisely and consistently, minimizing mistakes caused by fatigue, inattention, or variations in performing repetitive tasks.
        • Example: For example, robotic vacuum cleaners, smart home devices, and automated appliances have made household chores more manageable and less time-consuming for many.
      • Main idea 2: Over time, investing in machines for certain tasks can reduce long-term costs. 
        • Supporting idea: While there might be initial investment expenses, the overall operational costs could be lower than employing human labor for certain jobs.
        • Example: Consider a household that invests in a robotic vacuum cleaner. Initially, there's an upfront cost to purchase the machine. However, over time, the operational costs are significantly lower compared to hiring a human cleaner or spending time and resources cleaning manually. The machine works consistently without requiring a regular wage, breaks, or additional expenses like health insurance, showcasing how investing in this machine reduces long-term operational costs for household maintenance.
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: The delegation of various mechanical tasks to robots is likely to give rise to greater unemployment figures. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng tính từ "various" tiếng anh 
        • Supporting idea: In the workplace, especially in manufacturing, millions of workers worldwide, particularly unskilled ones, would lose their jobs to cutting-edge robotic systems. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt: Currently, large numbers of manual workers are being replaced by cutting-edge robotics systems in numerous factories around the world)
        • Example: 
          • For example, fully automated processes have already taken over monotonous jobs such as assembly-line workers or bank tellers in many developed countries such as the United States.
          • For instance, thousands of Chinese assembly workers at FoxConn, a major manufacturer of Apple products, have recently been made redundant after the company adopted a fully automated process that minimizes the need for a skilled and unskilled human labor supply
      • Main idea 2: At home, This tendendy may lead to a sedentary lifestyle, which results in some health problems such as obesity in the long term. >> IELTS UTOR lưu ý Cách dùng cụm in the long run​/​term/in the short term
        • Supporting idea: People are becoming overly dependent on technological assistance to deal with various household chores such as cleaning or washing dishes. 
        • Example: Imagine a family that heavily relies on automated devices for household chores, minimizing physical activity. While these technological conveniences make daily tasks easier, the decreasing need for physical movement could lead to a sedentary lifestyle, potentially contributing to health issues like obesity in the long term.

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