Phân tích"Many criminals continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can we solve this problem?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR đạt 6.5)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Many criminals continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can we solve this problem?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

Many criminals continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can we solve this problem?

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  • Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1 
    • Main idea 1: the prison system can make the situation worse when criminals put together in prison, and they make friends with other offenders  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Offenders mix with other criminals who can be a negative influence)
      • Supporting idea: While they are locked up in prison, they do not have much to do there, and they would exchange information about what they have done before they came to the prison or they may plan crimes with other inmates.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Crime, a crime hay Crimes và cách dùng trong tiếng anh
      • Example: A 2018 meta-analysis published in the journal "Criminology & Public Policy" by Laura DeLateur analyzed 60 studies on the impact of incarceration on recidivism. It found that spending time in prison is associated with a modestly higher chance of re-offending upon release.
    • Main idea 2: offenders often do not have any other means of earning money  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: People who commit crimes often have no other way of making a living)
      • Supporting idea:
        • They are poor, uneducated and lacking skills needed to maintain a job. 
        • A criminal record makes finding a job difficult as people usually avoid hiring ex-convict.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  TỪ VỰNG & IDEAS TOPIC CRIME IELTS
      • Example: A 2018 study published in the journal "Criminology & Public Policy" found a significant association between poverty and property crime. The study suggests that individuals with lower socioeconomic status are more likely to commit crimes, particularly property crimes, due to limited legitimate opportunities to meet their needs
  • Body 2: Trả lời câu hỏi 2 
    • Main idea 1: Implement a system for classifying inmates based on their level of risk and the nature of their offenses. 
      • Supporting idea: Keep violent and non-violent offenders, as well as first-time and repeat offenders, separate to minimize negative influences.
      • Example: The Federal Bureau of Prisons in the United States employs a classification system that segregates inmates into various security levels based on their likelihood of escape, propensity for violence, and disciplinary issues, taking into account the severity of their offenses. This approach ensures that violent offenders or those with a violent history are housed in higher security facilities with enhanced supervision, while non-violent offenders, particularly first-time offenders, are typically placed in lower security environments with greater access to rehabilitation programs and social interaction.
         
    • Main idea 2: prisons need vocational training which makes inmates to prepare (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Prisons should provide education or vocational training)
      • Supporting idea: 
        • They can learn practical skills such as computer programming, car maintenance and graphic design.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách paraphrase từ CRIME tiếng anh
        • In this way, they can be hired for a position that requires this certain knowledge and skills.
      • Example: 
        • Community service is another way to reform offenders. 
        • Rather than being locked up in prison with other inmates, offenders can help society and become useful to their local community, and these activities would eliminate the negative influence that prisons can have.

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