Phân tích"In some countries, it is common for women to participate in the workforce when their children are young. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích"In some countries, it is common for women to participate in the workforce when their children are young. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?"IELTS WRITING TASK 2

In some countries, it is common for women to participate in the workforce when their children are young. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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  • Body 1: Viết về advantages
    • Main idea 1: Working women tend to be more financially independent (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Women can have more money to take of their children)
      • Supporting idea: 
        • When women work, they make money that adds to their families’ financial well-being.  (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: By contributing to their family’s financial needs, women can often make important decisions for their families as well)
        • This helps pay bills, buy food, and educate children.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ"depend"tiếng anh
      • Example: For example, working women are able to buy friends and family special gifts or even help them in emergency situations. Or as a mother, they can take the children on more outings without the worry of being financially strained.
    • Main idea 2: Working allows women pursue their dreams and talents, as well as works on their goals by pursuing careers of their choice
      • Supporting idea: 
      • Example: 
  • Body 2: Viết về disadvantages
    • Main idea 1: Working women have little time to take care of their families because their jobs are very demanding and time-consuming.  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng tính từ"time-consuming"&"consuming"tiếng anh ...
      • Supporting idea: 
        • It can be hard for some to find enough time for themselves, their families, children, and friends.
        • When children are young, they still need the guidance and support from the mother
        • The lack of time spent with children, especially when they are really young, might lead to the lack of communication and understanding between the mother and the child
      • Example: 
    • Main idea 2: Women with career commitments juggling both work and family responsibilities eventually face health problems such as stress and tiredness
      • Supporting idea:
        • Many jobs are very stressful, and many women cannot handle high levels of work-related stress.   >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Phân biệt "Stressed", "Stressful", "Stress ...
        • Their nature predisposes them to anxiety and depression more than when compared to men. 
      • Example: 

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