Phân tích "In many countries, children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so and suggest solutions." IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "In many countries, children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so and suggest solutions." IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

In many countries, children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so and suggest solutions.

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng 2 question có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Trả lời câu hỏi 1 
    • Main idea 1: (Viết về less fit) children are more exposed to technology and hence, they end up spending their time at home, without doing any physical work.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • They live a sedentary life since they spend most of their time playing computer games or watching televisions, which can eventually create a detrimental impact on their health. ( IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: They spend most of their time watching television or playing video games on a computer)
        • This technological advancement has reduced the level of physical activity in this specific age group >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn  Cách dùng danh từ "level" tiếng anh 
      • Example: 
    • Main idea 2: (Viết về fatter) as fast food joints are ubiquitous in every city, children end up eating a lot of junk foods. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn  Cách dùng tính từ "ubiquitous" tiếng anh
      • Supporting idea: 
        • These items are mostly prepared using a lot of oil, which can lead to various diseases like obesity. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý  Paraphrase từ "lead to" tiếng anh
        • This has a negative impact on the health of young people who consume them regularly. 
      • Example: renowned food stalls like KFC and Burger King serve oily items like burgers and fried chickens in their meal box. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "item" tiếng anh 
  • Body 2: Trả lời câu hỏi 2 
    • Main idea 1: The government can make sports mandatory in school curriculum, which will not only help children to feel rejuvenated but also enable them to become fit.
      • Supporting idea: If schools conduct tournaments and events frequently, it will encourage their students to indulge in physical activities. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "encourage" tiếng anh
      • Example: 
    • Main idea 2: the authorities should impose restrictions / curbs on food joints
      • Supporting idea: 
      • Example: the well-known restaurant Taco Bell has a famous children's meal where they serve items like custard and chicken salad, which are beneficial for health.

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