Phân tích "Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You should write at least 250 words.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your answer with examples and relevant evidence.

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng opinion essay thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • The notion that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have children and then bringing them up is deeply flawed. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Fatherhood ought to be emphasized just as much as motherhood, and fathers should be encouraged to play an active role in their children's lives)
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: This can lead to a lack of attachment between fathers and children
      • Supporting idea: 
        • When fathers are not given equal responsibility and opportunity to participate in the upbringing of their children, they are often not as involved in their children's lives as they could be. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Word form "involve" tiếng anh
        • This can result in a lack of attachment and bonding between fathers and children.
      • Example: There is a study that found that fathers who took paternity leave and were given equal responsibility in the care of their newborns had stronger bonds with their children and were more involved in their lives compared to fathers who did not take paternity leave and were not given equal responsibility. 
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: Fathers play a vital role in child-rearing and their involvement in the process is essential for children's well-being. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Children benefit from the involvement of both parents in their upbringing, as it provides them with different perspectives, skills, and experiences)
      • Supporting idea: 
        • When fathers are not given equal responsibility in the upbringing of their children, children may miss out on these important benefits, hindering their development and growth.
      • Example: Research has shown that when fathers are actively involved in their children's lives, they are more likely to be well-adjusted, confident and successful in their academic and personal lives.
• IELTS TUTOR gợi ý main idea khác:
  • Main idea: when fathers are involved in the upbringing of their children, mothers are also more likely to experience better mental health, and are less likely to experience feelings of isolation and loneliness. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "experience" tiếng anh

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