Phân tích "Everyone should stay at school until 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (ĐỀ thi ​9/10/2022)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Everyone should stay at school until 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (ĐỀ thi ​9/10/2022)

Everyone should stay at school until 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng opinion essay thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE  có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea:  If students leave school early with only a basic education, they are unlikely to be able to find any skilled work (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: by studying at high schools, students could gain a wealth of knowledge and skills that help meet higher-level qualifications in the future HOẶC: provide learners with sufficient education and preparation for further education)
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Most young people under the age of eighteen have very little real-world experience and have very little idea of what career they will pursue.
        • Staying at school until the age of eighteen will allow them further opportunity to develop their education and time to decide upon a suitable career path 
        • The education people receive between the ages of 16 and 18 is crucial for anyone who does not want a lifetime of unskilled work in a factory. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Candidates having higher qualifications have a competitive advantage in such degree-based society) >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "advantage" tiếng anh
      • Example: The Organisation for Economic Co-operation and Development (OECD) reports a strong correlation between educational attainment and employment opportunities. Individuals with higher levels of education tend to have lower unemployment rates and access to a wider range of job options
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: schools also provide social and moral education, which is of paramount importance to teenagers. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Schooling keeps young learners away from those dangers until they are fully aware of the outside world)
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Because people under 18 do not have sufficient intellectual capacity to distinguish between right behavior and wrong ones, they could easily commit crimes if they were not educated well enough. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng danh từ "Capacity" tiếng anh
        • Educational environment is the safest one  for adolescents who are not mature enough to distinguish between the right and the wrong.
        • Being exposed to the real world at early age, juveniles may be lured by social temptations and involve themselves in unlawful activities such as drug dealing, stealing and so on, which may ruin their future.
        • This is particularly important for those between 16 and 18 who have many temptations and benefit from the organised framework that school provides.
        • Young people who stay in school until the age of 18 tend to be more responsible and help build a stronger society.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

Education plays a crucial role in shaping an individual's future, and there is a growing consensus that staying in school until the age of 18 is essential. I completely agree with this viewpoint because it ensures a solid educational foundation and equips young people with critical skills needed for modern society.

Firstly, remaining in school until 18 provides individuals with a robust educational foundation, leading to better job prospects, higher incomes, and overall socioeconomic advancement. Generally, individuals with higher levels of education have greater access to a wider range of job opportunities. Completing high school equips students with essential skills and knowledge that are prerequisites for entry-level positions in many industries. For instance, the Organisation for Economic Co-operation and Development (OECD) reports a strong correlation between educational attainment and employment opportunities. Individuals with higher levels of education tend to have lower unemployment rates and access to a wider range of job options. This demonstrates that a solid educational background can significantly enhance an individual's career prospects and economic stability.>> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI 30/5/2020 IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (kèm bài sửa HS đạt 6.5)

Secondly, staying in school until 18 allows young people to develop critical thinking, problem-solving, and technical skills necessary to thrive in an increasingly complex world. The skills and knowledge required to navigate society and the workforce are constantly evolving, driven by rapid technological advancements. Remaining in school until 18 enables students to acquire and refine these skills through comprehensive coursework and hands-on experiences. For example, modern education systems incorporate technology and critical thinking exercises into their curricula, preparing students to effectively utilize and adapt to new technologies. This continuous learning process is crucial for young people to remain competitive and adaptable in a fast-changing job market.

In conclusion, staying in school until 18 is essential for ensuring that individuals have a solid educational foundation and the critical skills needed for success in today's complex world.

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