Giải đề"In some countries, many people choose to educate their children at home by themselves instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Đề thi thật 21/10/2023) - (kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "In some countries, many people choose to educate their children at home by themselves instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

In some countries, many people choose to educate their children at home by themselves instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách làm tuỳ theo target mình hướng đến:
  • Cách 1: Theo hướng Totally (disadvantages>advantages)
    • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: Their youngsters can not meet other people, so they will lack of socail skill and might feel shine during conversatins with other if work in a company or integrate into a novel intelligent environment. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ LACK trong tiếng anh
      • Supporting idea: They can only interact with their family like their parents, grandparents and brothers and sisters if they have some to play with.
      • Example: My friend - Anya, raised in isolation by overprotective parents, struggled with poor social skills, but through joining clubs, volunteering, and persistent effort, she learned to interact confidently and effectively with others during her college years.
    • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao disadvantages>advantages
      • Main idea: homeschooled children can not go to university, which will detrimental make them unhappy and can not have a bright future (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: homeschooling children have not many chances to studying in a college program)
      • Supporting idea: They will difficulty applying for university since they cannot take certificates that been awarded by their family. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng từ "since" tiếng anh 
      • Example: Despite being a bright and motivated homeschooled student, my friend - David faced challenges with college applications and standardized test scores, leading to initial rejections and a sense of lost opportunities, until he took a gap year to independently prepare and volunteer, ultimately gaining acceptance to a small liberal arts college.

  • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (partly - CHỈ RIÊNG với dạng OUTWEIGH này thì nếu target 7.0 có thể viết còn các dạng khác không nên viết partly nhé) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Parents grow closer with children, and parents can spend hour with their children when teaching them so they can be kind with them, confirming the relationship between them.
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Teaching children involves sharing experiences, challenges, and accomplishments. 
          • These shared experiences can foster a stronger bond between parents and children as they work together to learn and grow. 
      • Main idea 2: It allows both parents and children to choose the times of their classes flexibly.
        • Supporting idea: When, for instance, parents are not able to conduct lessons during the day, they may decide to teach their child early in the morning or in the evening after returning from their work. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng động từ "conduct" tiếng anh 
        • Example: Consider a working mother with a demanding job who, due to flexible online or evening classes, can actively engage in her child's education and maintain a strong parent-child connection despite her busy work schedule, ultimately supporting her child's learning needs and fostering a healthy family relationship.

    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: their youngsters can not meet other people, so they will lack of social skill and might feel shine during conversations with other if work in a company or integrate into a novel intelligent environment. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng danh từ "company" tiếng anh 
        • Supporting idea: they can only interact with their family like their parents, grandparents and brothers and sisters if they have some to play with.
        • Example: My friend - Anya, raised in isolation by overprotective parents, struggled with poor social skills, but through joining clubs, volunteering, and persistent effort, she learned to interact confidently and effectively with others during her college years.
      • Main idea 2: homeschooled children can not go to university, which will detrimental make them unhappy and can not have a bright future.
        • Supporting idea: They will difficulty applying for university since they cannot take certificates that been awarded by their family.
        • Example: Despite being a bright and motivated homeschooled student, my friend - David faced challenges with college applications and standardized test scores, leading to initial rejections and a sense of lost opportunities, until he took a gap year to independently prepare and volunteer, ultimately gaining acceptance to a small liberal arts college.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

In recent years, the concept of homeschooling has gained popularity as an alternative to traditional schooling. This trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures.

On the one hand, homeschooling offers several advantages. Firstly, parents can develop a closer bond with their children as they spend significant time teaching and guiding them. This process, which includes sharing experiences and overcoming challenges together, can foster a stronger emotional connection between parents and their offspring. Secondly, homeschooling allows for greater flexibility in scheduling classes. For instance, working parents can adjust their teaching hours to early mornings or evenings, accommodating their work commitments while still actively participating in their child's education. This adaptability ensures a harmonious balance between professional and familial responsibilities.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

On the other hand, homeschooling also presents notable disadvantages. One significant drawback is that children may struggle to develop social skills due to limited interaction with peers. Without opportunities to engage with others, they might feel shy in social or professional settings later in life. For example, my friend Anya, raised in isolation by overprotective parents, faced challenges in building confidence until she joined clubs and started volunteering during her university years. Furthermore, homeschooled children often encounter difficulties when pursuing higher education. Without officially recognized qualifications, they may face barriers to university admissions, potentially hindering their career prospects. A case in point is my friend David, who initially struggled with college applications but eventually succeeded after taking a gap year to enhance his profile.

In conclusion, while homeschooling offers flexibility and strengthens family bonds, its limitations in social development and academic progression make the advantages and disadvantages equally significant.

1. Foster: Thúc đẩy, bồi đắp
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: This process can foster a stronger emotional connection.
   → Quá trình này có thể bồi đắp mối liên kết tình cảm sâu sắc hơn.

2. Flexibility: Tính linh hoạt
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Homeschooling allows for greater flexibility in scheduling classes.
   → Việc học tại nhà mang lại tính linh hoạt cao hơn trong việc sắp xếp các buổi học.

3. Adaptability: Khả năng thích nghi
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: This adaptability ensures a harmonious balance.
   → Khả năng thích nghi này đảm bảo sự cân bằng hài hòa.

4. Social skills: Kỹ năng xã hội
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Children may struggle to develop social skills.
   → Trẻ em có thể gặp khó khăn trong việc phát triển kỹ năng xã hội.

5. Shy: Nhút nhát, rụt rè
   IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: They might feel shy in social or professional settings.
   → Họ có thể cảm thấy rụt rè trong các tình huống xã hội hoặc chuyên nghiệp.

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