Giải đề"Children’s education is expensive. In some countries, governments pay partly or all education fees.Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?"IELTS WRITING (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Giải đề"Children’s education is expensive. In some countries, governments pay partly or all education fees.Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?"IELTS WRITING (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR)

Children’s education is expensive. In some countries, governments pay partly or all education fees.Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng outweigh có 2 cách viết:
  • Cách  1 theo  hướng  TOTALLY (cụ  thể  là  TOTALLY  AGREE), nếu  viết  theo  cách  này  có  thể  bố  cục  bài  như  sau:
    • Body 1: Lí  do  thứ  1 vì  sao đồng  ý với quan điểm đề cho là "governments pay partly or all education fees"
      • Main idea: Free education results in the decrease in the illiteracy rate  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Cách dùng động từ "provide" tiếng anh 
      • Supporting  idea: Kids who go to college will have more opportunity to find work, and they would be the future workforce for the nation
      • Example: Singapore government has  sponsored schooling fees for their youthful generation, which motivates them to visit universities or schools; this is why Singapore has a top qualified workforce leading to their development.
    • Body  2: Lí  do  thứ  2 vì  sao đồng  ý với quan điểm đề cho là "governments pay partly or all education fees"
      • Main idea: Households might not worry about fiscal burden due to high school fees  >> IELTS  TUTOR  hướng  dẫn  Phân biệt "Worry" & "Concern" tiếng anh
      • Supporting  idea: They would have more cash to deal with nourishment and health care for their kids. 

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• • Cách 2: Theo hướng Partly (tức là advantages = disadvantages) 
    • Intro câu 2, advantages = disadvantages (this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures)
    • Body 1: On the one hand, viết về advantages 
      • Main idea 1: Free education results in the decrease in the illiteracy rate
        • Supporting  idea: Kids who go to college will have more opportunity to find work, and they would be the future workforce for the nation>> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ Hướng dẫn đề thi IELTS 21/11/2020 bài WRITING TASK 1 (map) về school library (kèm bài sửa cho HS đi thi)
        • Example: Singapore government has  sponsored schooling fees for their youthful generation, which motivates them to visit universities or schools; this is why Singapore has a top qualified workforce leading to their development.
      • Main idea 2: Households might not worry about fiscal burden due to high school fees
        • Supporting idea: They would have more cash to deal with nourishment and health care for their kids. 
    • Body 2: On the other hand, viết về disadvantages 
      • Main idea 1: One concern is the strain on public finances. 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Allocating substantial funds to education may divert resources from other crucial sectors such as healthcare, infrastructure, or social welfare. 
          • Striking a balance between investing in education and addressing other societal needs becomes a challenging task for policymakers.
      • Main idea 2: There is a risk of complacency in the education system when the funding is solely provided by the government. 
        • Supporting idea: 
          • Lack of competition and accountability may lead to inefficiencies and a decline in the overall quality of education. >> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI THẬT TASK 2 (dạng advantages & disadvantages) NGÀY 04/8/2020 IELTS WRITING GENERAL MÁY TÍNH (kèm bài được sửa hs đi thi)
          • The absence of financial incentives for schools and educators to excel could result in a stagnant and uninspiring educational environment.

Nếu mình viết hoàn chỉnh cả bài ra thì sẽ như sau nhé:

In the dynamic realm of education, the crucial consideration revolves around determining who bears the financial responsibility for children's learning, with some countries opting for government sponsorship to cover some or all associated costs. In my opinion, this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measures.

On the one hand, the merits of government-sponsored education are evident. Foremost among these is the significant reduction in the illiteracy rate. By removing financial barriers, free education opens the doors of opportunity for children, especially those from economically disadvantaged backgrounds. As exemplified by the Singaporean government's proactive stance in sponsoring schooling fees, this approach motivates the younger generation to pursue higher education, ultimately contributing to a highly qualified and skilled workforce. Furthermore, relieving families of the financial burden associated with high school fees has far-reaching positive implications. When households are freed from the worry of covering educational expenses, they can redirect resources toward essential aspects of child development, such as nutrition and healthcare.>> IELTS TUTOR có hướng dẫn kĩ PHÂN TÍCH ĐỀ THI THẬT TASK 1 (Complaint letter) NGÀY 04/8/2020 IELTS WRITING GENERAL MÁY TÍNH (kèm bài được sửa hs đi thi)

On the other hand, the disadvantages of government-sponsored education must be acknowledged. One primary concern is the strain on public finances. Allocating substantial funds to education may inadvertently divert resources from other critical sectors, such as healthcare, infrastructure, or social welfare. Another significant drawback lies in the potential complacency within the education system when funding is solely provided by the government. The absence of competition and accountability may lead to inefficiencies and a decline in the overall quality of education. Without financial incentives for schools and educators to excel, there is a risk of fostering a stagnant and uninspiring educational environment.

In conclusion, I do believe that the potential outcomes, both positive and negative, of government sponsorship covering some or all expenses related to children's education are significant. Only through a thoughtful and well-calibrated strategy can nations harness the full potential of their youth while ensuring the sustainability of their broader social and economic development.

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