Phân tích "Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (computer-based 24/6/2022) (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR đạt 7.5)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (computer-based 18/6/2022)

Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

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• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: the role of classes involving art is, admittedly, as important as that of others.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • While math which regularly requires students to calculate and solve mathematical questions helps develop their mental agility and problem-solving ability, painting and drawing facilitate a child’s development of his or her emotional intelligence. 
        • The significance of art-based subjects is also as great as that of English and other languages because all enable the learners to better express their ideas, either using verbal communication such as speaking or non-verbal channels like the way they sketch their characters or use color patterns. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng động từ "enable"
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: I can help students get used to having a better understanding of others’ emotion without them having to admit it. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Those classes such as painting or drawing allow children to enhance their imagination)
      • Supporting idea: By attending these classes, students stand a chance to learn how to observe works of art and understand the artists’ feelings through what they drew.
      • Example: 
  • IELTS TUTOR cung cấp thêm các ý khác:
    • Putting art classes into the school curriculum can help to discover talents. Many children are good at arts (singing, playing musical instruments) -> it is better for them to learn arts instead of academic subjects.
    • Art classes are a form of recreational activities for children. >> learning how to sing can help them relax. If they only focus on academic subject -> likely to experience stress.
  • Nếu theo quan điểm TOTALLY DISAGREE có thể cân nhắc các ý sau cùng IELTS TUTOR:
    • Main idea 1: no matter how important these subjects are, rendering them compulsory may adversely impact students in many ways. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: not every student is enthusiastic about art, which causes this subject to become a source of boredom and stress when students are forced to learn it HOẶC: Teaching art for children who are not interested can be a waste of time and money) >> IELTS TUTOR tổng hợp Từ vựng topic "boredom" 
      • Supporting idea:  This amount of time could have been otherwise allotted for other classes that they are more interested in so that they could make full use of their time for what they like.
    • Main idea 2: should art be obligatory at school, students who are not artistically gifted may have great difficulty achieving good grades at this subject. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác:  Many children do not have the talent to perform arts. Example: some students who cannot sing well might feel embarrassed during lessons -> negative impact)
      • Supporting idea: It is not easy for everyone to improve their artistic skills for a short period of time, which may negatively affect the students’ GPA at the end of the term. 
    • Các ý khác: 
      • Main idea: the role of classes involving art is not as important as that of others. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Art classes do not provide essential knowledge -> children should not be forced to learn) >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng tính từ essential / inessential
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Unlike Computer science or English that can be still of good use even after the students graduate from their high school, drawing or painting does not help increase their chance of winning a slot in their university. 
        • This is because not all majors in tertiary education require people to know how to draw a picture but they do need to have good command of English or certain computer proficiency to perform better at university. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "require" tiếng anh 
        • In contrast, graduates who have learned a lot about art but fail to place enough emphasis on their English or computer using ability may be faced with great difficulties finding a well-paid job. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng "by contrast/in contrast/in contrast to sth"
        • Not only may this cause them to be troubled by financial issues but they may also be discouraged before losing their happiness in life which is of great importance.

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