Phân tích "Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (computer-based 24/6/2022) (Kèm bài sửa HS IELTS TUTOR đạt 7.5)

Bên cạnh Phân tích bài essay về "The number of visitors in the UK" IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (table), IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Phân tích "Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?" IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (computer-based 18/6/2022)

Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

IELTS TUTOR lưu ý:

• Dạng opinion essay thì đã rất quen thuộc với các bạn học sinh lớp IELTS ONLINE WRITING 1 KÈM 1 của IELTS TUTOR rồi nhé.
• Dạng opinion essay, nếu theo hướng TOTALLY AGREE có thể bố cục bài như sau:
  • Body 1: Nêu lí do thứ 1 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: the role of classes involving art is, admittedly, as important as that of others.
      • Supporting idea: 
        • While math which regularly requires students to calculate and solve mathematical questions helps develop their mental agility and problem-solving ability, painting and drawing facilitate a child’s development of his or her emotional intelligence. 
        • The significance of art-based subjects is also as great as that of English and other languages because all enable the learners to better express their ideas, either using verbal communication such as speaking or non-verbal channels like the way they sketch their characters or use color patterns. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng động từ "enable"
  • Body 2: Nêu lí do thứ 2 vì sao TOTALLY AGREE
    • Main idea: I can help students get used to having a better understanding of others’ emotion without them having to admit it. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Those classes such as painting or drawing allow children to enhance their imagination)
      • Supporting idea: By attending these classes, students stand a chance to learn how to observe works of art and understand the artists’ feelings through what they drew.
      • Example: 
  • IELTS TUTOR cung cấp thêm các ý khác:
    • Putting art classes into the school curriculum can help to discover talents. Many children are good at arts (singing, playing musical instruments) -> it is better for them to learn arts instead of academic subjects.
    • Art classes are a form of recreational activities for children. >> learning how to sing can help them relax. If they only focus on academic subject -> likely to experience stress.
  • Nếu theo quan điểm TOTALLY DISAGREE có thể cân nhắc các ý sau cùng IELTS TUTOR:
    • Main idea 1: no matter how important these subjects are, rendering them compulsory may adversely impact students in many ways. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: not every student is enthusiastic about art, which causes this subject to become a source of boredom and stress when students are forced to learn it HOẶC: Teaching art for children who are not interested can be a waste of time and money) >> IELTS TUTOR tổng hợp Từ vựng topic "boredom" 
      • Supporting idea:  This amount of time could have been otherwise allotted for other classes that they are more interested in so that they could make full use of their time for what they like.
    • Main idea 2: should art be obligatory at school, students who are not artistically gifted may have great difficulty achieving good grades at this subject. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác:  Many children do not have the talent to perform arts. Example: some students who cannot sing well might feel embarrassed during lessons -> negative impact)
      • Supporting idea: It is not easy for everyone to improve their artistic skills for a short period of time, which may negatively affect the students’ GPA at the end of the term. 
    • Các ý khác: 
      • Main idea: the role of classes involving art is not as important as that of others. (IELTS TUTOR gợi ý cách diễn đạt khác: Art classes do not provide essential knowledge -> children should not be forced to learn) >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng tính từ essential / inessential
      • Supporting idea: 
        • Unlike Computer science or English that can be still of good use even after the students graduate from their high school, drawing or painting does not help increase their chance of winning a slot in their university. 
        • This is because not all majors in tertiary education require people to know how to draw a picture but they do need to have good command of English or certain computer proficiency to perform better at university. >> IELTS TUTOR lưu ý Cách dùng động từ "require" tiếng anh 
        • In contrast, graduates who have learned a lot about art but fail to place enough emphasis on their English or computer using ability may be faced with great difficulties finding a well-paid job. >> IELTS TUTOR hướng dẫn Cách dùng "by contrast/in contrast/in contrast to sth"
        • Not only may this cause them to be troubled by financial issues but they may also be discouraged before losing their happiness in life which is of great importance.

IELTS TUTOR gợi ý bài tham khảo:

Art classes such as painting or drawing play a vital role in children’s growth, and I firmly believe they should be made compulsory in high school. This is because they foster emotional development and cultivate creativity in ways that traditional academic subjects cannot.

First of all, the role of art-based subjects is equally pivotal (cực kỳ quan trọng; very important and influential) as that of core ones like mathematics and languages. While math, which constantly requires learners to solve problems, enhances mental agility (sự nhanh nhạy trí tuệ; the ability to think quickly and clearly), artistic activities such as painting and drawing stimulate emotional intelligence (trí tuệ cảm xúc; the ability to understand and manage emotions). Moreover, the significance of these classes is comparable to that of languages, as they both enable students to articulate ideas, either through verbal communication or through non-verbal channels (kênh phi ngôn ngữ; ways of communication without words) such as colors, sketches, and visual patterns. This illustrates that making art classes mandatory ensures a more well-rounded education (nền giáo dục toàn diện; an education covering different aspects of development).>> tham khảo CẦN VIẾT & THU ÂM BAO NHIÊU BÀI ĐỂ ĐẠT 8.0 SPEAKING & 7.0 WRITING?

Secondly, such lessons allow children to sharpen their imagination and become more empathetic individuals. By observing works of art, students can interpret the artists’ emotions and perspectives, thereby gaining a deeper insight into (cái nhìn sâu sắc vào; deep understanding of) human experiences. Furthermore, integrating art subjects into the curriculum can help uncover hidden talents (khai phá tài năng tiềm ẩn; discover abilities not easily noticed) that might otherwise go unnoticed. For instance, many children excel in painting, music, or singing, and being provided with such opportunities not only nurtures their potential but also acts as a recreational outlet (hoạt động giải trí; activity that relaxes and entertains) to relieve academic stress. Without these, students may face burnout from focusing solely on academic disciplines.

In conclusion, art classes should undoubtedly be compulsory in high school, as they are fundamental to fostering creativity, emotional growth, and balanced personal development.

📌 New Vocabulary

1. equally pivotal (cực kỳ quan trọng; very important and influential)

   • Synonyms: crucial, essential, fundamental

   • Antonyms: trivial, negligible, unimportant

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: The role of art-based subjects is equally pivotal as that of core ones like mathematics and languages.

2. mental agility (sự nhanh nhạy trí tuệ; the ability to think quickly and clearly)

   • Synonyms: quick-wittedness, sharpness, alertness

   • Antonyms: slowness, dullness, sluggishness

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Math enhances mental agility by requiring students to solve complex problems.

3. emotional intelligence (trí tuệ cảm xúc; the ability to understand and manage emotions)

   • Synonyms: empathy, self-awareness, interpersonal intelligence

   • Antonyms: emotional ignorance, insensitivity, detachment

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Artistic activities such as painting stimulate emotional intelligence.

4. non-verbal channels (kênh phi ngôn ngữ; ways of communication without words)

   • Synonyms: visual communication, symbolic expression, body language

   • Antonyms: verbal channels, spoken language, oral communication

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Students can express ideas through non-verbal channels like sketches and colors.

5. well-rounded education (nền giáo dục toàn diện; an education covering different aspects of development)

   • Synonyms: holistic education, balanced learning, comprehensive training

   • Antonyms: narrow education, limited education, specialized training

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Making art classes mandatory ensures a more well-rounded education.>> Form đăng kí giải đề thi thật IELTS 4 kĩ năng kèm bài giải bộ đề 100 đề PART 2 IELTS SPEAKING quý đang thi (update hàng tuần) từ IELTS TUTOR

6. insight into (cái nhìn sâu sắc vào; deep understanding of)

   • Synonyms: awareness of, perception of, comprehension of

   • Antonyms: ignorance of, misunderstanding of, misconception of

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Students gain insight into human experiences through observing artworks.

7. uncover hidden talents (khai phá tài năng tiềm ẩn; discover abilities not easily noticed)

   • Synonyms: reveal abilities, discover strengths, bring out potential

   • Antonyms: ignore abilities, neglect skills, overlook strengths

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Art classes can uncover hidden talents in children.

8. recreational outlet (hoạt động giải trí; activity that relaxes and entertains)

   • Synonyms: leisure activity, pastime, relaxation source

   • Antonyms: stressful activity, burden, chore

   • IELTS TUTOR xét ví dụ: Art classes act as a recreational outlet to relieve stress.

📌 Difficult Grammar Structures

1. While math, which constantly requires learners to solve problems, enhances mental agility, artistic activities such as painting and drawing stimulate emotional intelligence.

   • (Câu phức sử dụng mệnh đề quan hệ và phép đối lập "While")

   • Vietnamese: Trong khi môn Toán, vốn liên tục yêu cầu học sinh giải quyết vấn đề, giúp tăng sự nhanh nhạy trí tuệ, thì các hoạt động nghệ thuật như vẽ lại kích thích trí tuệ cảm xúc.

2. This illustrates that making art classes mandatory ensures a more well-rounded education.

   • (Câu phức với mệnh đề danh từ “that + clause”)

   • Vietnamese: Điều này minh họa rằng việc bắt buộc các lớp nghệ thuật đảm bảo một nền giáo dục toàn diện hơn.

3. By observing works of art, students can interpret the artists’ emotions and perspectives, thereby gaining a deeper insight into human experiences.

   • (Câu mở đầu bằng mệnh đề trạng ngữ "By V-ing" và sử dụng “thereby”)

   • Vietnamese: Bằng cách quan sát các tác phẩm nghệ thuật, học sinh có thể diễn giải cảm xúc và góc nhìn của nghệ sĩ, từ đó có cái nhìn sâu sắc hơn về trải nghiệm của con người.

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